Money makes the world go round. Without money, one would have a hard time in this world. But, this world also has a lot of problems. And a lot of these problems are because of money. Why are there so much homeless people in Hawaii? They don't have money. Why is everything expensive in Hawaii? Everybody needs more money. The Merchant of Venice by Shakespeare is a story about all of these different problems that were cause by one thing. Money. A rich merchant gets in a lot of trouble because of his bankruptcy and a poor man can't get a girl unless he has a lot of money. The Merchant of Venice by Shakespeare portrays the idea that money is the root of all problems.
The first problem in the book was Bassanio's love for a girl. He wanted to go and steal her heart but he couldn't because of his lack of money. His problem was that he didn't have enough money to show the girl that he was rich. This girl Portia was also rich, making it so only rich men would be suitable to be her life partner. This made poor people, such as Bassanio not suitable to go and take Portia away with him. The solution to this problem was also involved with money. Bassanio and his rich friend Antonio borrowed money from a lender named Shylock. The action of them paying Shylock back leads to the next problem of the book.
The second problem was Bassanio and Antonio's lack of money to pay back Shylock. Antonio's money was supposed to get back to him sooner, but it failed to do so. This was a major problem for Antonio and Bassanio because if they failed to pay back the money, they would pay the fee of a pound of their own flesh. The root of this problem was money. Making big deals involving money will result in a lot of problems.
In conclusion, money is needed for everything in the world. And The Merchant of Venice shows that money will also lead to problems. Two major problems in the story linked all the way back to money. It was the root of the problem. The Merchant of Venice proves that money is the root of all problems.
HIGHLY INCOMPLETE ESSAY. YOU INTRO DISCUSSION NEEDS TO BE MORE COMPLETE AND INTRO OF BOOK AND SUMMARY COULD BE A BIT MORE SPECIFIC. YOU NEED TO HAVE DISCUSSION AFTER SUMMARY THAT CONNECTS PLAY TO THEME BEFORE STATING THE THESIS. BODY PARAGRAPHS HAVE NO DIRECT EVIDENCE WHICH IS REQUIRED AND PARAGRAPHS ARE JUST A LONG SUMMARY. YOU NEED DISCUSSION THAT PROVES THE THEME YOU HAVE CHOSEN IS EVIDENT IN THE PLAY. LASTLY CONCLUSION IS HIGHLY INCOMPLETE IN SUMMARY OF ESSAY, SUMMARY OF PLAY IN RELATION TO THESIS AND THEN LASTING INSIGHT. AS(1)
ReplyDelete1.) Instead of asking questions and answering them in the summary part of the intro, you should elaborate more on it. I feel that its too simple and doesn't really set up a strong foundation for your essay as it should be. I suggest throwing out the questions and, just explaining more on how money supports us, gives us problems, etc.
ReplyDelete2.)Your synopsis should connect more to your theme and introduce the names of characters. Basically more explaining and connecting.
3.) You must utilize quotes.
4.)Should explain more on how money was the main factor to the problems that were stated in the body paragraphs.
5. In the conclusion there is not enough summarization of your essay and there is a lack of impact.
1.) Instead of asking questions and answering them in the summary part of the intro, you should elaborate more on it. I feel that its too simple and doesn't really set up a strong foundation for your essay as it should be. I suggest throwing out the questions and, just explaining more on how money supports us, gives us problems, etc.
ReplyDelete2.)Your synopsis should connect more to your theme and introduce the names of characters. Basically more explaining and connecting.
3.) You must utilize quotes.
4.)Should explain more on how money was the main factor to the problems that were stated in the body paragraphs.
5. In the conclusion there is not enough summarization of your essay and there is a lack of impact.