Small and handy
Not to be played with
Not sweet like candy
I have lots of tools that are useful in life
Therefore I am a swiss army knife
I have a lot of sharp points
And I'm kept clean
I can be very helpful
When the situation is mean
I am small, but I still look cool
And I'm even better with all of these tools
I also have a magnifying glass
Those little details will never pass
I see everything big and small
Even though I'm not that tall
I will get old, I don't have eternal life
This is because I am a swiss army knife
I can be used in any situation
My wide set of tools work in any location
I'm always getting better to beat the competition
To be the best one out there is my life long mission
I am handy, you could use me in your life
Sharp and fierce, a swiss army knife
I liked how it rhymes and it flows nicely. Great comparison to yourself and a swiss army knife. However, one thing you could work on is not giving what you are away in the first sentence. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteRhyming in a poem certainly creates a kind of flow that makes it easy to expect what's gonna come next. The metaphor itself is, of course, introduced upon the first line in the first stanza, so I guess I would recommend a more vague introduction, just to allow readers to contemplate more.
ReplyDeleteThere's a lot of things to a swiss army knife and it makes it really great as a metaphor to compare to oneself. I think that you really did exercise that range of things in a swiss army knife. You talked about it's size, some of the things within it, and how people use it.
In general: If anything, I'd just recommend that the metaphor be introduced a little later in the poem. Nice job with this!
-C